need to revise according to feedback (underlined) original essay in attachments
The “U.S. National Academies, the
Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change, the U.S. National Climate
Assessment, and many other primary scientific organizations around the world
agree that climate change is happening due to human activities with the highest
degree of certainty” (Myers et al., 2015) Try not to open your essay with a quote—though it is often
tempting! This quote can be used as one of your first pieces of evidence later
on, but it’s important to lead your reader into your topic, grab their
attention immediately, and establish your voice/control of the
“conversation.” In some more creative forms of writing and
professional paper-writing, you can sometimes get away with it, but for student
essays, it is usually considered bad practice. In 2023, the global average temperature was “1.45 ± 0.12 °C since these are purely statistics, they can act similarly to
paraphrasing and don’t need to be directly quoted. Just make sure they are
cited properly at the end of the sentence! above
the 1850–1900 average,” which meant that the planet had almost surpassed even
the 1.5°C lower limit that was stipulated in the Paris Agreement on climate
change. Meeting the targets of the Paris Agreement requires urgent action from
all sectors to reduce greenhouse gas emissions and transition to more
sustainable practices. On the other hand, the trend of greenhouse gas
concentrations still rose (Garner & Duran, 2024). Human actions,
particularly the burning of fossil fuels and deforestation, have led to an overabundance
of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, resulting in shifts in global
temperatures and weather patterns.