Make sure your thesis is specific and emphatic at the end of your introduction. Strive for a one-sentence version of your argument/intention in writing the paper. It should contain two ingredients: an arguable claim and your reasons for believing it. It should also directly reference your artifact! Why is this artifact so meaningful to so many? Consider your thesis a road map. I need an idea where I’m heading, specifically, before I get there. Surprise is great for a road trip, not so great for a paper! Don’t forget to weave your discussion of your chosen artifact THROUGHOUT your entire paper. However, be sure that each of your body paragraphs is discussing something new and fresh, that hasn’t already be covered in a previous paragraph. Don’t get caught summarizing too much of “what happened” but rather explain the happening’s significance. Fleshing out your thesis might help you make sure this is done correctly. If you had to title each body paragraph, would the titles be different? Could those titles make their way into your thesis as your “reasons?” 
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